一直以来,几乎所有的美国顶尖大学招生官都会告诉学生:我们喜欢“与众不同”的学生。
但是在成千上万的申请者之间,如何展示一个“与众不同”的你,绝不是一件容易的事情。
那么,如何让自己的文书令人感到耳目一新?顶尖大学都偏好什么类型的文书?
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文书怎么写才算是生动有趣?
有的学生认为在文书中展现出较多的活动经历才能打动招生官。但其实恰恰相反,在文书突出一两项高质量的活动描述会更令人印象深刻,文书可以不高大上,但至少要有能够打动人心的细节。
在申请过程中,经常有学生的第一稿文书就是活动经历的堆砌,像是一份加长版的简历,招生官根本无法从这些活动中了解你究竟是怎么样一个人,你从中最终收获了什么。
举例来说,有些学生会在文书中写到福利院,如何与众不同?
一般的写法是写自己通过去福利院的经历,更加地热爱公益、懂得回馈社区和品质更加高尚。
但这种做法却难免落入窠臼,不若尝试将自己做公益的形式,如现场为孤寡老人演奏音乐与社会学等联系起来,去寻找新灵感?
所以说,学生在顾问的帮助下,找准的切入点能够新颖,有说服力,很大程度上,即使再平凡的内容,也能将学生的个人特质表现的淋漓尽致。
当然,在美本申请中,除了需要好的切入角度和创意,还需要了解顶级名校的文书录取偏好。毕竟匹配度也是一个重要的考量方面。
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顶级名校都偏爱哪类文书?
文书是极具个性化的,它既是每一位申请者向大学展现自己个性的媒介,也是一所大学向申请者传达自己独特教育理念的渠道。
那么名校之间对学生的文书到底存在哪些偏好呢?
一家位于加州的美国科技公司Admitsee通过大数据,梳理了上万篇顶级大学本科录取文书,深度对比各大名校的偏好。
★ 哈佛更喜欢从逆境中读人生
哈佛文书中的苦难,消极言语要比斯坦福的频率高。比如说“癌症”,“艰难”,“困境”出现在哈佛文书中要远超过斯坦福。
相对比之下,斯坦福的文书中更频繁的用词是“幸福”,“热情”,“改善”,“进步” 等积极改变的字眼。
可以发现,斯坦福似乎对学生的天性、未来更感兴趣,而哈佛似乎对学生过往的经历,已经取得的成就更感兴趣。
★ 其他藤校各自有什么偏好?
数据分析发现,布朗大学倾向于义工和公共服务,但是这种话题反而在耶鲁的文书中出现频率较低。
另外,普林斯顿大学录取学生也会经常描述一次从失败中学习的经历;康乃尔和宾大则对学生描述个人将来抱负和愿景更有兴趣。
而达特茅斯和哥伦比亚则更为中性,从数据上未能看出他们对某些话题存在倾向性。
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关于文书写作的一些建议
以上这些发现都意味着,如果申请生试图用一篇完美的文书,来申请多所院校,那可能会收到不同的结果。
毕竟越是顶尖的大学,越有自己的独特偏好。
面对这些掌握着个位数录取率的招生官,申请生要赢得芳心,必须要为梦校量身定制内容。
这里,我们为大家分享一篇牛娃的文书,希望能帮大家打开思路。
Martin Altenburg
录取结果:2017年被8所藤校及斯坦福、MIT、芝加哥等学校录取。现就读于斯坦福大学。
背景:Martin Altenburg毕业于北达科他州的Fargo North High School。他的ACT成绩为35分(满分为36分);参加过很多数学竞赛,是Fargo Youth Initiative项目的创始人和共同主席。Martin同时多才多艺,喜欢并参与田径、游泳、小提琴、合唱等活动。
Essay文章:
My favorite time to run is at night.
This particular run in early August brought a break to the humid, muggy weather I left on the East Coast. I used my body as a human psychrometer, knowing that the cold feeling of evaporating sweat signaled much needed dry air.
I cross over the bridge into Minnesota. Out of my three sports, cross country is definitely my worst — but I continue to be hooked on it. Unlike swimming and track, my motivation to run is heavily intrinsic. I live for the long runs I take on by myself. While they rarely happen during our season, we were assigned a long run to complete over our first weekend of cross country. In reality, I was supposed to go six miles, but felt eight gave me more time to explore the home I had just returned to. My mind begins to wander as I once again find my rhythm.
My train of thought while running is similar to the way one thinks in the minutes before sleep — except one has more control over how these thoughts progress and what tangents they move off of. While special relativity would be the "proper" thing to think about, especially at MITES, I revive the violin repertoire I had turned away from for so long and begin playing it in my head. I'm now at the edge of town in between the cornfields. The streaming floodlights on the open road give me a sense of lonely curiosity, reminiscent of the opening lines of Wieniawski's first violin concerto. I come up with adaptations of the melody in my head, experimenting with an atonality similar to Stravinsky's.
I turn south onto a highway heading towards downtown. The dark night sky is broken by the oncoming light pollution. While I've longed for a road trip across the country, the neon lights from Sunset Lanes will have to do for Las Vegas. Turning west, I see a man and perk up as I try to look more menacing than I really am. But I relinquish. I realize that I did such an act simply because of the color of his skin. I kick myself for reverting to passive racism — something I spent much of the summer trying to overcome.
The bridge over Main Avenue leads me back into North Dakota and downtown Fargo. My city is on the eve of its annual pride week — the largest in North Dakota. Beyond the rainbow flags lining downtown, I see the Catholic cathedral I attend every Sunday outside of the summer. The juxtaposition brings back memories of trying to come to terms with my own beliefs. The conservatism on my mom's side of the family often clashes with the more liberal views of my dad's family. Fargo is known for its "nice" attitude, but the discussion of controversial issues is often set aside in favor of maintaining peace. On the surface this can be good, but it makes change a long and cumbersome process, and has caused me to become very independent in finding my own belief system — something especially difficult when these beliefs may have to do with your future identity.
The remaining part of my run is short and uneventful. The fact that the traffic lights have switched to blinking yellow and red means that I have been out later than usual. When I get home, I find that my run took somewhere around an hour — I honestly don't care about time during my distance runs. Longs runs are often seen as a runner battling the distance rather than time. But for me, long runs are a journey — both physically and mentally. Each time I run a route, I understand my surroundings and city more and more, and couldn't be more excited and sad to know that I'm leaving this place in a year's time.
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